Screenplay- Take 2

Having looked over our first draft again we realized it seemed too much like a short film and didn't have enough in it that related to the drugs that are used throughout the song 'The A Team' which we are hoping to use in our film. We decided that we would try and second draft and this time we would add drugs into it more and hide the identity of the killer better as it was obvious who it was in the last one. We decided to add a scene where we see the final girl and the killer (she doesn't know he is the killer) fighting about drugs and the final girl dumping him. We thought this could be a good reason for the killer to kill, he is angry and high of drugs. We also added a scene where we show the now ex-boyfriend  sat smoking and drinking to show the audience that he is a drunk and a druggie. We also decided to show three of the deats- as this is a slasher horror- and link their deaths with different drugs, one dies from an injection of an overdose of herione- which the killer gives her, one is strangled by a rope usedf to cut of blood when injectnig drugs and the final death is caused my a sharpened blackened spoon that had been used to heat up different drugs.

1. EXT. IN THE PARK- DAY

Eleanor and Hunter are out in the park. Close up of holding hands. Hunter spins her into him and she looks up at him smiling before she rests her head on his chest and he wraps his arms around her protectively. 

2. INT. HUNTER'S ROOM- DAY

Eleanor is holding up some DRUGS and looking at Hunter who is staring back. 

ELEANOR

(angry)

When were you planning on telling me about this?

HUNTER

I wasn't...

ELEANOR

Why? you do realize this will kill you!

HUNTER

I know

ELEANOR

(angrier)

Stop being so distant. talk to me!

Hunter doesn't reply. he pushes her against the wall, his fist slams into the wall beside her head and Eleanor cowers away from him.

HUNTER

(angrily)

Just be quiet ok? I don't care!

ELEANOR

(scared)

Well... if you don't care... i guess we're over!

Eleanor then gets out of his arms and runs out the room.

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3. INT. BEDROOM TO LIVING ROOM- NIGHT

Eleanor dressed in a white towel. Looks in the mirror. Wipes her tears whilst smudging her eye make-up.

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Slowly walks through the living room with memories of her deceased friends. Hanging photos of her friends all happy, focus one with them all on night of the murders- before the deaths. 

Walk of shame.

Enters the bathroom.

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4. INT. BATHROOM- NIGHT

Holds the handle. As she twists her wrist you see a carved in heart with a 'H' in the middle of it. Closes the door.

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Turns on tap. Bath is ready. Close up of her feet. Drops the towel.

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LONG SHOT

Blurry, steamed up bathroom to censor her getting into the warm bath.

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Side view the bath. Eleanor sits in a upright fetal position. Then lays down.

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Close up of her face. Pulls her hair back. She sighs. Looks agitated. Empty alcohol bottles around her. A sharp and used razor beside the bath with a small amount of blood on it, bloody marks along the side of the bath.

ELEANOR

(stutters and shivers)

I'm sorry. I should have warned you all about him. But I didn't... I'm sorry... I'm so sorry.

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Eleanor takes a DRUG and closes her eyes for a few moments. But passes out due to drug. Her head falls in the bath. 

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 HUNTERS ROOM- DAY

Hunter is sat in his room smoking as he looks around. He see's PICTURES of him and Eleanor and goes over to them before he pulls them down one by one and rips them up, throwing them in his bin beside him. He continues to smoke and get higher and higher.

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 EXT. ALLEY WAY- NIGHT

The killer is in the background with CHARLIE in the front looking scared and worried. Charlie has cuts and and bruises on her from the fighting with the killer.

CHARLIE

(begging)

Who are you?

There is no reply from the killer. The killer takes a few big strides and is stood behind CHARLIE with a syringe of heroine. He puts the needle in her and makes her OD, killing her instantly.

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The killer slightly closer than with Charlie. AMY is in the foreground with the killer behind her. 

AMY

(scared)

What do you want with me?

The killer still doesn't reply. He stays a little way from her.The killer moves over to her with a ROPE (thing druggies use) and quickly gags her before he strangles her. Her body falls to the floor dead.

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The Killer is right behind DANIEL. He holds him and puts a knife to his throat.

DANIEL

(scared)

No!

The killer laughs and slit's his throat with a blackened spoon that has been sharpened. Daniel coughs and chocks coughing up blood and collapses to the ground, shaking and coughing as blood oozes from the wound in his neck. The killer disappears.

6. INT. BATHROOM- NIGHT

Close of her face. Air bubbles develops when she opens her mouth. Eyes wide open. Lifts her head out of the bath. Breathes heavily in and out. She realizes she almost drowned herself unintentionally. Sits up and pulls her hair back.

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CLOSE UP OF HER FOREARM TO EXTREME CLOSE UP OF HER WRIST

She finds fresh cuts on her arm and her wrist. The heart on her wrist turns into a broken heart. 

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The blood drips in the bath. She begins to panic. Discovers beside her that the razor has fresh blood on it.

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Pulls the bath plugs. Watches the blood and water flow away. 

Grabs the towel on the floor. Wraps it around her torso. Gets up and out the bath. 

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Walks to the sink. Turns the tap on and washes the blood away, furiously. Smacks the edges of the sink. Breathes intensely.  

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Slowly lifts up her head and looks at the steamed mirror. Discovers something dark next to her blurred reflection. Wipes the steamed mirror. 

CLOSE UP OF HER WIPING THE MIRROR, WHEN SHE REACHES THE DARK SHADOW. 

She discovers who it is. She turns and looks at the killer. 

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CLOSE UP OF HER FACE SCREAMING. 

The mask of the mysterious figure is dropped on the floor. Fear in her eyes. She turns around. Turns back to the mirror

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On the mirror. Written in blood 'You're Next'

HUNTER/ KILLER

(Low, deep, artificial voice)

You're next

Eleanor screams as Hunter forces her into a hoodie and shorts. Hunter then ties her hands together and gags her before he drags her to an underground lair.(Void)

7. EXT. OUTSIDE LAIR- NIGHT

Hunter drags Eleanor along the outside of the lair while she is tied up. He opens the door and drags (carries bridal style) her in.

8. INT. THE LAIR (THE VOID)

Hunter drags her in. Scanning the room and showing his weapon with blood dripping on it. He drags her through a door and down some stairs before he turns and leaves, slamming the door behind him.

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Shot of just the door.

FADES TO BLACK.